Anger

You mother fucker!
How could you fuck around?!
But when im done with you,
You won't be able to make a sound.

I'll break your face
Like your broke my heart..
I'll bury you in my backyard
So we can never be apart.

You fuckin' little prick.
I'm not letting you get away
Your time is up
And now you're going to pay.

I'll take this knife
And slit your wrists
Then tie you up..
And give you one last kiss.

So say goodbye
And hold your breath
Because what's soon to come
Will be your death.

I don't like the words in this 1 but it's a good thinking

I like it Mitch. Nice work.
-Kyle

M I T C H wrote:

I'll break your face
Like your broke my heart..
I'll bury you in my backyard
So we can never be apart.

You fuckin' little prick.
I'm not letting you get away
Your time is up
And now you're going to pay.

Change "your" to "you" and "letting" to "lettin'". I think that will make it flow a little bit better.

Other than that, it's nice.

-Nick

Yeah. I think I like it like Nick say it.

i think this is cool! maybe just change some of the words in it..

I am sorry to say, you guys have no taste in poetry. Stop the cursing, add some meaning and you have a moderate poem. All I see is your cursing, are you trying to act cool? If you want a good poem stop with the cursing, and add as I said before some meaning. And no I am not trying to flame, or get my post count up but actually trying to help you mature in your poetry. Make the poems actually make sense and I think you will be a decent poet.

Very nice.
I liked it

Michael wrote:

Very nice.
I liked it

If I may ask, Why did you like it?