My Story, Intro.

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I'm very big with English as you can tell I enjoy using grammar, spelling correctly and of course punctuation. I write poems, but not very often. I am currently in the middle of a story and have decided to let you all see a preveiw. It isn't completed adng it's just a rough draft, so I don't care about errors.

Kevon walked to school, using the shortcut through the woods to get there. Kevon was thinking about the many times his mom had told him not to use the shortcut. In the midst of his thinking he tripped, and the contents of his bag spilled out. Picking up the contents he checked to make sure everything was there. Picking up his homework, math book, and his father's gun. Kevon continued to walk to school, a little nervous at first but gaining courage with each step.
Kevon saw Nothern High School in the distance. Kevon started walking faster, attempting to get there before the bell rings. Kevon got into the school right before the bell rings. Instead of heading off towards his first class, he went off into the direction of the janitors closet. Checking to make sure no one was looking he opened the door. Kevon pulled out his father' gun, and took a few deep breaths. Kevon shouted out something about everyone shoving something up there ass, and pulled the trigger.
"Of course the gun doesn't work when I want to kill myself!" Kevon shouts out.
Kevon puts the gun into his back pocket and walks out of the janitorial closet. Kevon starts heading toward the entrance. Kevon notices a school bully, Chris, and starts to walk faster. Chris starts walking towards Kevon.
"Hey fag get over here." Chris shouts at Kevon.
"Leave me alone." Kevon retorts.
"I will beat the crap out of you."
"Go ahead."
Chris raises his fists and heads towards Kevon. Kevon thinks for a second and pulls the gun out of his back pocket.
"Move and I will kill you." Kevon says quietly to Chris.
"P.. p... put... put it down" Chris finally manages to whisper.
"Fuck this" Kevon pulls the trigger thinking the gun was broken. Kevon is deafened by the explosion of the gun.
"Oh fuck, Oh shit." Kevon looks to wear Chris was standing and sees he shot Chris right between his temples. Kevon runs out of the school, dropping the gun.
"I will beat the crap out of you."
"Go ahead."
Chris raises his fists and heads towards Kevon. Kevon thinks for a second and pulls the gun out of his back pocket.
"Move and I will kill you." Kevon says quietly to Chris.
"P.. p... put... put it down" Chris finally manages to whisper.
"Fuck this" Kevon pulls the trigger thinking the gun was broken. Kevon is deafened by the explosion of the gun.
"Oh fuck, Oh shit." Kevon looks to wear Chris was standing and sees he shot Chris right between his temples. Kevon runs out of the school, dropping the gun.

Subject: Re: My Story, Intro. Sun Jan 25, 2009 9:45 am

Nice story. I luv it.

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Anticryption wrote:: Copied much or what?! I think you stole thing to someone..

You are accusing me of stealing it? First off you have no proof, secondly I did not steal it. Thirdly don't ever accuse someone without a proper foundation.

Subject: Re: My Story, Intro. Sun Jan 25, 2009 9:58 am

I changed my mind. I'm sorry. I read it and it was ok.

Subject: Re: My Story, Intro. Sun Jan 25, 2009 2:37 pm

sweat ''i will beat the crap out of you'' lol thats the good part

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cool me12 wrote:: sweat ''i will beat the crap out of you'' lol thats the good part

Lol that's the only good part? Sad

Subject: Re: My Story, Intro. Sun Jan 25, 2009 2:57 pm

soz i didnt mean in that way i meant that was the part that made me laught

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Wow, No one can spell besides me. Well I mean for the most part.

Subject: Re: My Story, Intro. Mon Jan 26, 2009 4:53 pm

Yeah. I like you with stories. You got a lot of imagination Cool

Subject: Re: My Story, Intro. Tue Jan 27, 2009 5:13 pm

This story is very... Interesting. lol!

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Cyber what way should I take that? And to Anti, Thank you. I work hard on the plot of the story, I want it to make sense and be interesting at the same time. Of course this is a rough draft and I expect I will be changing the plot around so you guys never know what will happen when the story is actually released.